Delete filler words like "very," "really," or "I think."
Read it out loud. If you stumble over a sentence, it probably needs a rewrite.
End the introduction by dropping your thesis statement. 3. The Body Paragraphs (The Rooms)
End with a final thought that leaves an impression—a "so what?" moment that connects your topic to the bigger picture. 5. The Polish (The Inspection)
Rephrase your main argument with the added weight of the evidence you just provided.